Second Draft of Screenplay

We have revised and re-written our screenplay (shown below). We showed it to our teacher, who made the suggestion that we try to get our five pages down to at least three and restructure our script, as it is currently too long, and would exceed our limit of two minutes. We will be doing this soon, but as we may not finish it within this lesson, we may have to meet up soon in order to complete it before we begin to film.

LEAP YEAR

SETTING: HOUSE

Company logo and stuff comes in with Macho Man playing in the background. 20-30 seconds of party montage. Sped up and slowed down moments. Shots of BARRY and LOUIS drinking a lot and BONNIE not drinking much. Film title comes on screen then goes off and reveals the next scene.

SETTING: PARK

(Extreme close-up of LOUIS’ phone on the grass ringing. Macho Man changes from the background music to his ringtone.)

(Extreme close of LOUIS’S hand twitching.)

(Close up of LOUIS’S foot in the tree.)

(Low angle long shot of LOUIS looking startled in a tree and then proceeds to fall out of the tree next to the phone.)

(Mid shot of a dazed LOUIS on the floor realizing his phone is going off. He picks up and answers the phone.)

LOUIS
Err? Hello?

(Mid-shot of BONNIE talking on the phone)

BONNIE
Where the hell are you two? Its eleven o’clock and neither of you came back last night! Why didn’t you come back last night? I’ve been calling all over the place trying to find you, and you finally answer your phone!

LOUIS
What?

(Close up of LOUIS recoiling from his phone as BONNIE shrieks)

(Mid-shot of BONNIE)

BONNIE
Where. Are. You?!

(Close up of a terrified LOUIS)

(Long shot of LOUIS looking around)

(Pan out shot)

LOUIS
Well, there’s trees and grass and I think I see a lake. I might go and feed the ducks actually.

(Long shot of BONNIE grabbing a bag)

BONNIE
So, you’re in the park. Is Barry with you?

(Long shot of LOUIS looking around the park)

LOUIS 

Nah, got any bread? I’m all out.

(Mid-shot of BONNIE as she freezes)

BONNIE
You lost Barry! You blithering idiot! Of all things to lose, why’d you lose him? Go and find him now, before he does something stupid! I’m coming into the park now *muffling sounds from the phone* LOUIS? LOUIS? What’s going on?

(Mid shot of Louis feeding his phone to the duck)

LOUIS

Here you go friend.

(Close up shot of BONNIE as she slams down the phone)

(Long shot of LOUIS as he begins stumbling around)

(Close up shot of LOUIS in shock)

LOUIS

Oh my sweet Jesus.

(BONNIE walks on to the shot)

BONNIE

LOUIS what happen – what the fuck?!

(Long shot. Camera pans up to reveal Barry taped to the tree.)

LOUIS
Hey, good news, I found Barry

BONNIE
I can see that. What the hell happened?

LOUIS
Cello taped to a tree! Fast asleep bless him!

BONNIE
Does it matter? Get him out

LOUIS
I’ll try. *LOUIS starts gnawing the tape.*

BONNIE
You’re useless. I have scissors. In my manicure set.

LOUIS
Sheesh… women.

BONNIE
I wouldn’t need them if you watched him for once. I said he could leave when I left but no, you have to insist and he ends up taped to a tree.

LOUIS
Nothing wrong with a bit of fun.

(BONNIE glares at LOUIS and starts going through her bag for a pair of scissors)

(Long shot of a still sleeping BARRY)

(Mid-shot of an annoyed BONNIE and amused LOUIS)

BONNIE

Can you please explain to me how in the hell Barry ended up like this?

LOUIS

Uh... Can you tell me why you're such a bitch?

BONNIE

Louis. Stop being such an arse and at least help me try and get him down.

LOUIS

Hey I tried but my canines aren't doing the trick

(Extreme close up of BONNIE’s hands as she cuts the tape)

(BARRY wakes up as BONNIE cuts the tape.)

BARRY

Morning. Couldn't make us a cuppa would ya?

BONNIE

Barry, now I don't want to alarm you. But look down.

BARRY

Morning Glory?

LOUIS

Yeah but that's not what we're on about mate.

(Point of view shot as BARRY looks at himself.)

(BONNIE looks angrily. LOUIS looks and waves with a big grin on his face.)

BARRY

Aha... Whyyyyy am I stuck to a tree?

LOUIS

Because BONNIE's a bitch.

BONNIE

Just shut up and um... Try to wriggle free.

(BARRY pushes forward and comes free from the tree falling on LOUIS.)

BARRY

Hey LOUIS is that a boner in your pocket or are you just happy to see me.

(LOUIS chucks him at the camera where it would fade in to the next scene.)